Drafting Speech After Harry's advice (2)

Euthanasia, right or wrong? A young kid is walking down the street and then a car hits him. Is he dead? No, he is alive. Is it a blessing or a curse that he is alive? He has broken all his bones in his hands leg and faces and they he will never recover so he will never be able to walk, never able to speak never able to do anything. So he cannot walk he cannot talk he cannot eat he cannot touch so why should he live? In hope of surviving or finding a cure? Are somethings worse than death? yes a living death where all you can do is look at things and not participate. Would you like this? would you want to live through this? I know I wouldn't. what then what you would do? Would you want to live like this? Wouldn't you wanted to be released from that torture! I know I would rather go to the void rather than live a life of hell.

People do we put down animals? Is it euthanasia? Is it murder? According to you it is but we do it without question to save the animals from days or years of pain and suffering so isn't saving people from suffering right? Wouldn't people who are so crippled they cannot do anything want to stop their suffering? I know I would. I know that I would rather pass on than suffer pain. Things are worse than pain some of those things are; Living in constant pain, never being able to do anything or say anything. If those happens I know I would rather finish my time here. Wouldn't you? wouldn't you want to stop the suffering and stop the pain and the devoid of life. These people who can do things are basically living husks because they live off machines. If you believe in god you will say it is wrong, but when they were on the brink of death the only thing keeping them alive is human technology not your god he/she/they wanted him/her to finish their life they tried to kill them but we kept them alive and we are pushing them through the pain and torture of living in constant pain. Your god/s wanted them to come to them and we are denying them of dying and going to your god/s.

So when you think of euthanasia don't think of it as murder think of it as release release from the pain release from the suffering. If euthanasia is allowed than people who are in pain and suffering every day but cannot stop it because they are so crippled or paralyzed that they cannot move talk and can only think, why not let them go to the void? why not let them pass on? why not let them end the suffering and end the pain! Why not let them Finish their time on Earth and in time and space.? So the only way to save these people from constant pain and suffering every day is to let them pass away and the only way to do that is to let euthanasia be allowed and not be thought of as murder!

Harry's Comments

·                     Did the introduction capture you? 

The introduction describes your point but I believe that starting with rhetorical questions may not be a strong way to start your persuasive speech.

·                     Is there enough information to convince you of their opinion? 

The information touched on a large amount of information but in my opinion it does not go in-depth to the reasons why people believe in those ideas about euthanasia.

·                     Is their opinion clearly organised?

In you introduction it states that if it is your choice but in the rest of your speech it says it is another person’s choice to end their suffering.

·                     What suggestions would you make to improve the speech?

To try to organise your speech a little bit better because it will make your argument a lot better and using a better anecdote and  more emotion.